Movie script;
(Mahendra Singh Dhoni from ticket collector to trophy collector.)
(M. S. Dhoni India's future pride, Ranchi, Bihar in 1981, the year Dhoni was born. He was getting interest in Cricket in his childhood. However, just like comman people his father wanted him to see doing a good job. He used to think Cricket is not a career to choose.) As per me their assuming dailogues were-
Mahi to mother; I want to play cricket it's in my dream.
Mother of Mahi; Yes Mahi, you can but your father has some hope from you what about those. He is getting old day by day and all the responsibility are on your shoulders now.
Mahi; Mama, I'm denying to these,but there's something special in it. I see a dream daily and it ignite the fire in me. It's here, imagine.
Dailogues are continuing...
M. S. Dhoni became a successful captain of Indian Cricket team, but it was not easy journey to reach at this level. He was a ticket collector before he became a cricketer.
Looks impressive...title is mentioned.good use structure of plot but their is one part you need to work on climax and ending in interesting way...At the end. You have done a great job👏
ReplyDeleteHi Aisha! You have done a great job with very less mistakes.
ReplyDeleteNice collection of images and nice facts also.
But, you can improve your sentence structure that will help you a lot.
It was amazing. I would give you excellent for inciting incident as your story has background knowledge. For Rising Action I would suggest you 'need more improvement' you could create more suspense on your story. For climax I would give you Average. For resolution I would give you excellent as you gave better conclusion.
ReplyDeleteThank you all for feedback, I'll definitely improve it.
ReplyDeleteInteresting product to read. Exposition, inciting incident, rising incident and resolution are given. Images and dialogue add an impression to the product.
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